1Thanks for sending your draft, Keiko. Overall it reads well, but a few sections need attention.
2I expected that. Could you tell me which parts you think are the weakest?
3Mainly the literature review, because you summarise the studies without really comparing them.
4Ah, I see. So I should highlight where the authors disagree with each other.
5Exactly. Also, your referencing is inconsistent; some entries follow the wrong style completely.
6Right, I mixed two systems together. I will convert everything to the Harvard style.
7Good. One more thing, the conclusion is too short for a report of this length.
8Should I add recommendations there, or keep those in a separate final section?
9Put them in the conclusion, and link each one back to your findings clearly.
10Understood. When would you like the revised version, by Monday or Tuesday?
11Tuesday morning is fine, since I am away at a conference all day Monday.
12Perfect. I will email it to you before nine o'clock, and keep the formatting unchanged.